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The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented line graph depicts the
number
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 of
store
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closures
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 and
openings
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 in a particular country from the year 2011 to 2018. On the whole, both the opening and closure rates experienced a declining trend during the said period,
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significant fluctuations leading to several instances of role reversals. Starting with
store
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closures
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, the graph indicates that in 2011, the
number
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 of
store
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closures
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 was less than that of
store
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openings
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, at around 6,500. The
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 fell to 6,000 in 2012,
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 the
closures
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 began to surpass the
openings
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 in subsequent years. The
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 of
closures
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 peaked at over 7,000 in 2013 before declining to approximately 6,600 in 2014.
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, the year 2015 witnessed a dramatic drop in the
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 of
store
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closures
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, plummeting to just under 1,000. Following that, the closure rate gradually picked up, reaching around 5,000 by 2016 and maintaining that
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 until 2018. Turning to new
store
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openings
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, with approximately 8,500
openings
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 in 2011, the
number
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 of new
store
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openings
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 was greater than the
number
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 of
store
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closures
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. The
figure
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 fell to just under 4,000 in 2012, and there was a minor increase in 2013 and 2014, with approximately 5,000 and just over 6,000
openings
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, respectively.
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, the rate of new
store
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openings
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 declined, with the
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 hovering around 4,000 for the following three years before reaching a low point of 3,000 in 2018, emerging as the lower of the two categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, store, closures, openings, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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