The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981-2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981-2007.
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The line chart illustrates the consumption of diverse types of jams,
such
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as margarine, low-fat & and reduced spreads, and butter from 1981 until 2007 in an Asian country. The unit measurement is in
grams
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.
To begin
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with, the three jams categories have had experienced a sharp drop in 2007. The margarine experienced the highest fall with approximately 40
grams
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,
while
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, it had a good start back
then
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in 1981 with up to 100
grams
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.
Moreover
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, margarine
also
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had its peak at 100
grams
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in 1991 until 1996. It was soon followed by butter with a drastic fall of just below 60
grams
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in 2007,
while
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, it peaked in 1986 with almost tripled its quantity from 2007.
Finally
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, at the bottom, there was low fat & and reduced spreads with just under 80
grams
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.
This
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type first emerged in 1966 and has been rising until 2001 before experiencing a steady drop until 2007.
Overall
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, the proportion of people's preference to consume jams has regressed.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • pattern
  • popularity
  • significant
  • steady increase/decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • outstrip
  • surpass
  • dip
  • sales
  • culinary preferences
  • market share
  • per capita
  • demographics
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