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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst profesionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or a college lecture.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst profesionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or a college lecture.
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The both
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 charts describe the working
hours
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 and level of
stress
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differnet
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different
professional
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professions
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. Overview, the
business men
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businessmen
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 did work for maximum
hours
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 compared to other professions,
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 the
stress
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 level
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 highest in lecturers
instead
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 of
other
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others
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. As per the provided information on
bar
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the bar
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 graphs, 70
hours
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 per
weak
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week
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 work done by
business men
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businessmen
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, followed by movie producers which is less than 10
hour
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hours
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 from it.
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, the average
hours
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 of working is almost half
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 writers and doctors professional,
whilest
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whilst
while
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is reduce
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 by 20
hours
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. Surprisingly, the working
hours
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 of programmers and lawyers
is
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are
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 roughly
same
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the same
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aound
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around
 40
hours
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. Moving towards the pie chart, the lectures
having
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 a 25%
stress
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 which is calculated
almost
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as almost
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 10% less for doctors and 3% more for movie programmers.
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, the percentage of people who
suffering
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with
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stress
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 is almost
same
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 with approximately 10% for
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the chef
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chef
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chefs
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,
business men
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businessmen
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,
lawyers
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and lawyers
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however
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, 5% having
stress
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, stress with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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