The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Science

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is making greater impacts in today's world.

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, there

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counteractions, which proposed that the major aim should be to improve

individuals

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individuals'

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lives.

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essay will discuss reasons why I approve of

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statement.

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with,

science

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has provided us with new technologies, which are been used as permanent

cure

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for diseases. To elucidate

further

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this

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machines

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has helped to put an end to pains and sufferings that

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impossible to eliminate in the past.

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, since the introduction of

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marrow transplant, which is been used for

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healing of sickle cell disease, there has been no history of mortality.

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, the introduction of

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has made

great

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impact towards permanent

cure

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for ailments.

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, it enlightens the citizens on adequate measures to follow regarding their

health

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, it teaches the individuals

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safety precautions,

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intense considerations when making decisions pertaining

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general

well being

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, the use of herbal concoction in past times in Nigeria, for treatment of

ailment's

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was endangering the immune system.

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, since

western

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medicine has been in place, there has been more awareness,

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as seeking proper

health

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care from a professional and

also

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been

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cautious with any fluid intake posing as

form

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of medicinal medication.

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, modern medicine has played a role

with

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greater awareness regarding one's

health

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. In conclusion,

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am in the notion

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that

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science

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been

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important in improving one's

lives

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life

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. It has provided us with equipment for permanent cure of diseases

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and has

also

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enlightens

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individuals about the right decisions to consider regarding their

health

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Coherence & Cohesion

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Coherence & Cohesion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

265 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
enhancing quality of life
improvement of healthcare
transportation
communication
agriculture
energy sectors
eradication of diseases
prolongation of life expectancy
global challenges
climate change
overpopulation
food security
developed world
underprivileged communities

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