The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Science
is making greater impacts in today's world. Therefore
, there has be
counteractions, which proposed that the major aim should be to improve Wrong verb form
have been
individuals
lives. Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
This
essay will discuss reasons why I approve of this
statement.
To begin
with, science
has provided us with new technologies, which are been used as permanent cure
for diseases. To elucidate Fix the agreement mistake
cures
further
, this
machines
has helped to put an end to pains and sufferings that Fix the agreement mistake
machine
was
impossible to eliminate in the past. Change the verb form
were
For instance
, since the introduction of bone
marrow transplant, which is been used for Add an article
a bone
permanent
healing of sickle cell disease, there has been no history of mortality. Correct article usage
the permanent
Hence
, the introduction of science
has made great
impact towards permanent Add an article
a great
cure
for ailments.
Fix the agreement mistake
cures
Secondly
, it enlightens the citizens on adequate measures to follow regarding their health
. In other words
, it teaches the individuals on
safety precautions, Change preposition
about
as well as
intense considerations when making decisions pertaining their
general Change preposition
to their
well being
. Add a hyphen
well-being
For example
, the use of herbal concoction in past times in Nigeria, for treatment of ailment's
was endangering the immune system. Change noun form
ailments
However
, since western
medicine has been in place, there has been more awareness, Capitalize word
Western
such
as seeking proper health
care from a professional and also
been
cautious with any fluid intake posing as Wrong verb form
being
form
of medicinal medication. Add an article
a form
Therefore
, modern medicine has played a role with
greater awareness regarding one's Change preposition
in
health
.
In conclusion, i
am in the notion Change the capitalization
I
of
Change preposition
that
science
been
important in improving one's Wrong verb form
is
lives
. It has provided us with equipment for permanent cure of diseasesFix the agreement mistake
life
,
and has Remove the comma
apply
also
enlightens
individuals about the right decisions to consider regarding their Change the verb form
enlightened
health
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Coherence & Cohesion
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