You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Science

is making greater impacts in today's world.

Therefore

, there

has

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been counteractions, which proposed that the major aim should be to improve

individuals

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individuals'

individual's

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lives.

This

essay will discuss reasons why I approve of

this

statement.

To begin

with,

science

has provided us with new technologies, which are been used as permanent

treatment

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treatments

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for diseases. To elucidate

further

this

machines

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machine

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has helped to put an end to pains and sufferings that

was

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were

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impossible to eliminate in the past.

For instance

, since the introduction of

bone

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a bone

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marrow transplant, which is been used for

permanent

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the permanent

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healing of sickle cell disease, there has been no history of mortality.

Hence

, the introduction of

science

has made

great

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a great

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impact towards permanent

cure

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cures

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for ailments.

Secondly

, it enlightens the citizens on adequate measures to follow regarding their

health

In other words

, it teaches the

individuals

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individual's

individuals'

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safety precautions,

as well as

intense considerations when making decisions pertaining

their

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to their

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general well-being.

For example

, the use of herbal concoction in past times in Nigeria, for treatment of ailments was endangering the immune system.

However

, since Western medicine has been in place, there has been more awareness,

such

as seeking proper

health

care from a professional and

also

being cautious with any fluid intake posing as a form of medicinal medication.

Therefore

, modern medicine has played a role

with

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greater awareness regarding one's

health

. In conclusion, I am in the notion that

science

is important in improving one's

lives

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life

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. It has provided us with equipment for permanent

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cures

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cure

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cures

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of diseases and has

also

enlightened individuals about the right decisions to consider regarding their

health

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introduction conclusion present

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logical structure

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supported main points

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complete response

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clear comprehensive ideas

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relevant specific examples

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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