You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Science
is making greater impacts in today's world.
Therefore
, there
has
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been counteractions, which proposed that the major aim should be to improve
individuals
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individuals'
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lives.
This
essay will discuss reasons why I approve of
this
statement.
To begin
with,
science
has provided us with new technologies, which are been used as permanent
treatment
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treatments
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for diseases. To elucidate
further
,
this
machines
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has helped to put an end to pains and sufferings that
was
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impossible to eliminate in the past.
For instance
, since the introduction of
bone
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marrow transplant, which is been used for
permanent
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healing of sickle cell disease, there has been no history of mortality.
Hence
, the introduction of
science
has made
great
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impact towards permanent
cure
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for ailments.
Secondly
, it enlightens the citizens on adequate measures to follow regarding their
health
.
In other words
, it teaches the
individuals
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individual's
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safety precautions,
as well as
intense considerations when making decisions pertaining
their
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general well-being.
For example
, the use of herbal concoction in past times in Nigeria, for treatment of ailments was endangering the immune system.
However
, since Western medicine has been in place, there has been more awareness,
such
as seeking proper
health
care from a professional and
also
being cautious with any fluid intake posing as a form of medicinal medication.
Therefore
, modern medicine has played a role
with
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greater awareness regarding one's
health
. In conclusion, I am in the notion that
science
is important in improving one's
lives
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life
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. It has provided us with equipment for permanent
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cures
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cure
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of diseases and has
also
enlightened individuals about the right decisions to consider regarding their
health
.
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introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
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clear comprehensive ideas
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