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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you are selling • describe the furniture • suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...............,

#minutes #furniture #friend #date #addresses
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Dear Nora, I hope you are doing well. As you know I am soon going to shift
in
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new
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a new
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appartment
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apartment
 that's
in
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completely
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 opposite side of the city so, it's not possible to take the whole
furniture
 with me.
Moreover
, I know you recently moved
in
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 your new flat
therefore
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, why not I should sell you some of my
furniture
? I would like to sell some living room and bedroom
furniture
 that includes
a
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 L-shape grey velvet sofa with
wooden
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a wooden
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 coffee table of square shape.
Along with
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 I do have a glass-top black
dinning
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 table with black chairs with some golden touch.
Furthermore
, there is a
Queen size
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 bed with size tables and a small
round shape
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 couch. All the
furniture
 is new, I rarely stay at home and no buddy
visit
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 me so, all items are in a very good condition. I hope you will like my idea and would like to buy some pieces. Currently, I am out of town but, will be arriving home by 5th March. So, why
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 you come and visit me before I move and even have a look at
furniture
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. Best regards, Jass
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure the letter adequately covers all three bullet points in the prompt. Ensure that the reason for selling, the description of the furniture, and the suggestion for a date to come and see the furniture are clearly outlined.
task achievement
Maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter that is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend. Avoid overly formal language and use expressions and phrases that are commonly used in personal correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea and provide sufficient detail as per the prompt requirements.
coherence cohesion
Open the letter with a warm greeting and close it with an appropriate sign-off, demonstrating your relationship with the recipient and conforming to the norms of a personal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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