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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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These are data on the nutritional consistency of the two
dinners
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. The first pie chart illustrates various ingredients of medium baked potato,
while
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 others display macaroni's.
Overall
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, it was noticeable that the main material which dominated the two
dinners
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 was
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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,
whereas
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 the lowest were other
nutrients
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 and saturated fat. Looking at the details, even though both
dinners
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 have a high consistency of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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,
macaroni's
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the macaroni's
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 dose was far higher compared to a medium baked potato which was 52% of all nutritional.
In addition
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, the middle ingredients which were protein and glucose remained the same at 11%. Followed by the least material which was 26% of saturated fat and other
nutrients
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. On the other side, medium baked
potato
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potatoes
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 have two main ingredients that play a big role in
its
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their
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 nutritional dose, which are 35% of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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 and 25% of protein.
Additionally
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, glucose, other
nutrients
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, and saturated fat
were
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reached 40% in total.
To sum up
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, both
dinners
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 provide plenty of
nutrients
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 that can be advantageous for their consumers, even if their ingredient's consistency is different.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinners, nutrients with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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