The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst profesionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or a college lecture.
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The two charts illustrate eight variety of professional occupations. The pie chart displays the
stress
level
in each occupation
in percentage. The bar chart shows each occupation
's working hours
per week
.
To begin
with, the job businessmen have the highest proportion of work in a week
with an average of 70 hours
. Next,
there are movie directors with an average 10-hour working hours
difference. It was followed closely by doctors with less than 60% average working hours
. Nonetheless
, the stress
level
of people in this
industry is small with approximately 11%, 18%, and 15% respectively.
On the other hand
, three other groups, such
as writers, programmers, and lawyers are in the middle with an average working hours
ranging from over 40 hours
to below 40 hours
per week
. In contrast
, each occupation
's stress
level
is the lowest with an average of 7%.
Finally
, at the bottom, there are chefs and lecturers with 30% and below 30% hours
per week
each.
While
the working hours
of lecturers are the lowest the stress
level
of this
occupation
unexpectedly the highest with up to 25% of people experiencing it.
Overall
, there is no correlation between the working hours
and the stress
level
of each job.Submitted by alyarachmadivaa on
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