Some people think that the best way to resolve environmental problems is to increase fuel and vehicles’ prices. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
Some
people
argue that increase
Replace the word
increasing
Correct article usage
the prices
prices
Change the noun form
price
fuel
and gas Change preposition
of fuel
of
Change preposition
for
automobile
will solve Fix the agreement mistake
automobiles
environment
issues, I totally disagree with Replace the word
environmental
this
statement. Because is not the best way to fix this
problem, in this
essay I will examine the others
reason which is real action to fix Correct quantifier usage
other
enviromental
problems.
Correct your spelling
environmental
To begin
with, government should provide public transportation which must be proper for all citezens
. Correct your spelling
citizens
Then
, encourage people
to leave their own car to move to use public transport. Thus
, we can reduce utilization
of vehicles. Correct article usage
the utilization
For instance
, in developed
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the developed
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countries
country
all Add a comma
country,
people
prefer to use train
or buses for their Fix the agreement mistake
trains
mobilisation
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mobility
instead
of their own private vehicles. Because of that impacted to reduce air pollution in their country. So, increase
Wrong verb form
increasing
prices
of fuel is not a solution even damaged Correct article usage
the prices
sitution
Correct your spelling
situation
with
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which
impacted
to Wrong verb form
impacts
prices
of basic needs like rices
, meats, Change the wording
rice
kinds of rice
packets of rice
grains of rice
foods
, clothes and so on.
Fix the agreement mistake
food
Secondly
, after provide
convenient public transportation. We Change the verb form
providing
Makes
them to be Change the verb form
Make
a loyal users
and we can focus Correct the article-noun agreement
a loyal user
loyal users
to
Change preposition
on
next
steps. Correct article usage
the next
Government
provide green Add an article
The government
site
in a lot of Fix the agreement mistake
sites
place
to reduce pollution, Change to a plural noun
places
for
example
building amount of gardens or parks. Add the comma(s)
example,
While
Correct word choice
People
people
take recreation for their leisure time also
healthy because they are Correct word choice
and also
active
movement in green Change the word
actively
park
.
Fix the agreement mistake
parks
To
conclusion, Change preposition
In
i
disagree with Change the capitalization
I
increase
Replace the word
increasing
Correct article usage
the prices
prices
Change the noun form
price
fuel
vehicles to solve Change preposition
of fuel
environment
problems. Because it will be impacted Replace the word
environmental
to
Change preposition
by
prices
of basic needs like food and clothes. Correct article usage
the prices
Only
reason to fix Add an article
The only
that is
make
behaviour to loyal Change the verb form
to make
making
use
public transportation like Wrong verb form
using
train
Fix the agreement mistake
trains
dan
buses and build green Correct your spelling
and
site
like gardens and parks. Change the noun form
sites
thus
, It will reduce air pollution in our city.Submitted by fiez97 on
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