The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012

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the bar chart illustrates
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employee division in two categories
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at dominant faculties of Colleger in
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year 2012. the data below views
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boys
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in
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department.
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, those are had diverse a number of total students male and female each
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, The Arts
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. fourthly, in engineering had eighteen and
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.
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, in law had
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and sixty. sixthly, medicine had
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. In conclusion, the
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of the
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for each gender.
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