Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The data illustrates what kind of devices people use under 30
yaer
old in 2009 and 2019. Two tables are giving 6 subjects that are Mobile phone, Laptop, Tablet etc.
Correct your spelling
year
years
First,
in the
2009, Conventional Change the article
apply
TV
got the most
percentage which is 34%, Correct word choice
highest
while
2019
it is 4%. Change preposition
in 2019
Also
the Add a comma
Also,
least
percentage is Correct word choice
lowest
Tablet
(5%) which is only 3% lower than the Flat-screen Fix the agreement mistake
Tablets
TV
, and it 19
% in Add a missing verb
was 19
the
2019. The Change the article
apply
Convetional
Correct your spelling
Conventional
TV
appered
the most difference Correct your spelling
appeared
for
2009 to 2019, and the subtract data is 30%.
Change preposition
from
Next,
in the
2019, most of the Change the article
apply
datas
are above 10% except Correct your spelling
data
Conventional
Change preposition
for Conventional
TV
. 27% and 26% were the highest percentage
which are Flat-screen Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
TV
and Mobile Fix the agreement mistake
TVs
phone
each. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Also
, Conventional TV
is
the Verb problem
has
least
value which is 4% Correct word choice
lowest
that
I wrote above. Correct pronoun usage
which
Moreover
, there are two same value: 12%, which are Desktop computer
and Fix the agreement mistake
computers
Laptop
. The least difference between 2009 and 2019 was Desktop Fix the agreement mistake
Laptops
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
that
had onlyCorrect pronoun usage
which
6
% gap.Correct article usage
a 6
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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