Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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The data illustrates what kind of devices people use under 30

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old in 2009 and 2019. Two tables are giving 6 subjects that are Mobile phone, Laptop, Tablet etc.

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percentage which is 34%,

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it is 4%.

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(5%) which is only 3% lower than the Flat-screen

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2019. The

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2009 to 2019, and the subtract data is 30%.

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2019, most of the

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are above 10% except

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. 27% and 26% were the highest

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which are Flat-screen

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value which is 4%

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