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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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There has been a recent interest in the historical
connection
 to the houses
people
 live in. Sparked by curiosity to learn more, many
people
research
 the value of seemingly basic properties,
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connection
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connections
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 to historical events. In
this
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 I will explore the reasons why various individuals try to
research
 the historical
connection
 and provide methods on how to achieve it. The first reason would be the will to learn something new out of pure curiosity.
People
 have always been amazed by the past and what can we learn from it. That’s why, knowing that, perhaps, a president could have lived in your house is driving
people
 to do extensive
research
 on simple properties.
Therefore
, it can broaden one’s horizons
as well as
 inspire
to
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 do
research
 on other historical topics, which might be beneficial to the whole community.
In addition
, knowing more about the past and especially the individuals
that
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 lived in certain properties can strengthen the
connection
 between
people
, bring family secrets into the light,
keep
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and keep
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 the memories of the past linked to the present. Many families get forgotten, just because there is no one to remember them, and by exploring the memories of the past, we can keep the
memory
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 of older generations. In order to learn from the past a few methods could be implemented.
Firstly
, looking for information on the
internet
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 might be the easiest method to start.
For instance
, the widely available application “Google Maps” might provide necessary information on how the building could have looked before. Other sources like old telephone books may tell us to
who
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 the property belonged to. On top of that, contacting current or previous owners or inhabitants can be the source of first-hand information about the building and much more details that are not available
elsewhere
. In conclusion, the reasons why
people
do
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research
 the historical value of their homes can range from p
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task achievement
Make sure to complete the essay by providing a full conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to help connect ideas smoothly throughout the essay. While some linking words are used, increasing variety can aid in the overall flow of the essay.
task achievement
Elaborate more on your main points with detailed explanations and examples. This will help in fully developing your argument and enhancing the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the supporting sentences are directly relevant to that idea.
coherence cohesion
Work on the introduction to ensure that it effectively sets up the essay by clearly stating the main points that will be discussed.
task achievement
Include specific examples to support your reasons. While your essay mentions potential sources of historical information, concrete examples would add depth to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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