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NOW a days people are using more consumer goods like refrigerators or washing machines. Does it has more advantages or disadvantages

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These days people are more dependent on technology especially related to household items
such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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 or refrigerators. I believe that it has more advantages
such
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 as
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time saving
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time-saving
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 and physical comfort over the additional expenses or some health-related issues.
To begin
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 with, daily household items are very helpful in
such
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busy
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a busy
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 lifestyle. To illustrate
further
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, working parents hardly get
time
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 to cook or wash
cloths
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clothes
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 daily.
Therefore
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, they reserve the food in the refrigerator and
re-heat
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reheat
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 the meal whenever they want to eat.
For example
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,
couple
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a couple
the couple
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 who does the night shift
they
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apply
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cook extra so that they can eat
next
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the next
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 day which is without
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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 not possible to save for
such
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long
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a long
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time
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.
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, physical comfort significantly outweighs the drawbacks of
additional
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the additional
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expensive
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expense
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 of buying and maintaining the
consumer
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 goods. It helps not only teenagers to take care of their clothing and food but
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 helps the elders too. Without these
consumer
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 goods, it
it
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is
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 hard for sick or juveniles to wash or cook
regular
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regularly
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. They put less
efforts
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effort
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 and save more
time
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 and they do not need even specific strength or knowledge to use
consumer
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 products. Lack of these products will
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consumer
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consume
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 more
time
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 and will not be easy for everyone to cope with routine cooking or washing
cloths
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clothes
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 by
hands
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hand
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especially
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, especially
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for
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apply
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elders, sick or teenagers. In conclusion, having
consumer
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 goods in daily routine is very helpful for everyone. It plays a big role as
stress
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a stress
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 reliever. It is helpful in various ways, and people
willing
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are willing
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 to pay for
consumer
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 items even more price to get their comfort in daily activities.

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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve your score in coherence and cohesion, consider creating more cohesive transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to show the relationships between your ideas more clearly. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and that your essay flows logically from introduction to body paragraphs to conclusion.
Task Achievement
To enhance task achievement, ensure all parts of the prompt are fully addressed. Provide a more balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages, as the prompt requires. Consider expanding on the disadvantages to give them equal weight. Include more specific examples to illustrate your points, ensuring they are directly relevant to the topic at hand.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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