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Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen , considering the significance of primary & secondary level education in a learner's life. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#school #age #eighteen #significance #level #education #learner #life
The aim of my project is to examine what are the most popular disciplines of humanities among students in
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 I will express my opinion and describe my findings.
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According
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Foreign
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 the bottom of the table, making up (15%) and (5%) respectively. Predictably,
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 discipline than Foreign languages. The
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 of these two disciplines. Students use their native
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. It may lead to motivation loss and other mental problems. To avoid
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make their own schedule, which should contain enough time to rest. It is obligatory to plan your days, weeks and months to stay focused and productive. In conclusion, I believe that humanity studies is
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 part of our lives. They discover our feelings, improve mental health and
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 ourselves an important part of society.
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Task Response
Make sure to directly address the given topic and present a clear position on the statement 'Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a logical structure by introducing the topic, presenting arguments, and ending with a conclusion that restates your position.
Task Response
Support your points with specific examples or further explanation to reinforce your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Correct all grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for better clarity and coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to establish the main point and ensure all subsequent sentences relate to it.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compulsory education
  • Foundational knowledge
  • Career prospects
  • Economic mobility
  • Lifelong learner
  • Vocational training
  • Apprenticeships
  • Academic achievements
  • Global economy
  • Personal autonomy
  • Educational equity
  • Overqualification
  • Job market saturation
  • Inequality
  • Specialization
  • Skill development
  • Youth unemployment
  • Innovative pedagogy
  • Social integration
  • Critical thinking skills
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