Some claim that studying Kulchanut Sureerattananas great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

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Nowadays, there are several kinds of education that people can make a choice
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since the
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of
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remains
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. There are many parents
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who choose
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choose
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who choose
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to send their
children
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to study in
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the
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foreign
country
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as they believe that it provides greater advantages compared to their own
country
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. To my mind, I totally agree with
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the following reasons. One of the clearest things is that
children
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overseas courses can have a
chance
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to develop themselves.
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, they can expand
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knowledge as our societies have many things to find out, the education is not just only stuck in a classroom.
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, the diversity of
culture
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cultures
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can teach them new things that they have never faced before. Not only the
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of
academic
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that they could gain but
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, they will have a
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to practice living on their own without parents.
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staying in the
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, students could be spoiled by their
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and even get used to the environment, learning in other countries
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adaptability and management skills. They will grow up rapidly and can take care of themselves.
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, studying
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could lend the opportunity to meet
variety
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of people.
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,
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who taking master’s
degree
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in
the
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foreign countries could have lots of
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friends, maybe they come from
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different countries.
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provides a great connection for the future career, whether they could become co-workers or business partners.
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, as the world
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with the communication that
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international language speakers,
these
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learning could provide the second or third language skills
stimulations
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.
Children
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will be able to speak English or even Spanish, France which are
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crucial languages in the
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. They will have more
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to improve their working position. In summary, studying in
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country
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a country
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could be easier for
children
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as they remain in the same environment and use their
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togue
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, whilst learning
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outside
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of
hometown
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their hometown
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will develop
children
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’s capacities both in
academic
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academics
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and living
skill
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skills
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.
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, they could receive
the
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excellent
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connections
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and a
chance
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to improve their
approaching
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career path. Foreigners
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