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The two maps below show an island, before andafter the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before andafter the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided two maps illustrate the difference between
Youngsville
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 in 1990 and
Youngsville
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 in 2010,
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that
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which
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 is situated in New Zealand, after some rehabilitation.  
Overall
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, all houses and
majority
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the majority
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 of woodland that were located in the first year of the period have been totally replaced by skyscrapers, factories,
warehouses
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and warehouses
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 throughout the 20-year duration. It is noteworthy that new
railway
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 lines
also
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 were constructed in the northeast of
Youngsville
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.  
According to
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 the first map, multiple
of
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apply
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trees were removed in the vicinity of
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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 in order to set up
parking
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a parking
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 lot
as well as
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 new facilities for people
such
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 as golfing, fishing and swimming. Woodland and land houses both near
school
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the school
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 and
airport
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the airport
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also
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 were
knocked-down
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knocked down
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 to make way for new factories and warehouses.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
Youngsville
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 was replenished with two skyscrapers on the southern side of the map adjacent to
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railway
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the railway
a railway
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 line in 2010,
however
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, originally, there were just little land houses and greeneries 20 years ago.  
Besides
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,
enormous
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an enormous
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 stadium and parking for cars were established on the right of the second map. The extension of the
railway
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 lines can be observed in 2010
where
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when
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 they were extended up to
north
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the north
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 reaching as far as the stadium.
Finally
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,
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a new
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new
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a new
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 marina was constructed next to
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the railway
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railway
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the railway
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 station.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words youngsville, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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