The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows information about the stage of producing
sugar
from Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
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Overall
, the process of Linking Words
sugar
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have
seven stages from growing to drying and cooling.
First of all, the growing of Change the verb form
has
sugar
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canes
for Fix the agreement mistake
cane
timeline
between 12-18 months. Afterwards, the harvest Correct article usage
a timeline
sugar
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canes
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cane
by
two methods, Add a missing verb
was by
such
as by hand and by Linking Words
vehicles
machine. When the harvest by two Change the noun form
vehicle
method
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methods
finished
, picked up one by one Add a missing verb
is finished
sugar
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canes
to the machine to Use synonyms
crushing
into Change the form of the verb
crush
juice
.
After the Use synonyms
juice
of Use synonyms
sugar
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canes
, Use synonyms
this
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juice
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given
a limestone filter to Add a missing verb
is given
purifying
it. Change the form of the verb
purify
Then
, the liquid of purifying Linking Words
juice
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poured
into Add a missing verb
is poured
evaporator
and heated to become Add an article
the evaporator
an evaporator
syrup
. When the Use synonyms
syrup
already separates Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sugar
crystal from Correct article usage
the sugar
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syrup
with Correct article usage
the syrup
centrifuge
. In the Add an article
a centrifuge
the centrifuge
last
part before Linking Words
sugar
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canes
becomes Fix the agreement mistake
cane
sugar
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is
drying and cooling the Unnecessary verb
apply
syrup
to Use synonyms
big
tank to become Correct article usage
a big
sugar
.Use synonyms
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