The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows information about the stage of producing
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, the process of sugar
have
seven stages from growing to drying and cooling.
First of all, the growing of Change the verb form
has
sugar
canes
for Fix the agreement mistake
cane
timeline
between 12-18 months. Afterwards, the harvest Correct article usage
a timeline
sugar
canes
Fix the agreement mistake
cane
by
two methods, Add a missing verb
was by
such
as by hand and by vehicles
machine. When the harvest by two Change the noun form
vehicle
method
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
finished
, picked up one by one Add a missing verb
is finished
sugar
canes
to the machine to crushing
into Change the form of the verb
crush
juice
.
After the juice
of sugar
canes
, this
juice
given
a limestone filter to Add a missing verb
is given
purifying
it. Change the form of the verb
purify
Then
, the liquid of purifying juice
poured
into Add a missing verb
is poured
evaporator
and heated to become Add an article
the evaporator
an evaporator
syrup
. When the syrup
already separates sugar
crystal from Correct article usage
the sugar
syrup
with Correct article usage
the syrup
centrifuge
. In the Add an article
a centrifuge
the centrifuge
last
part before sugar
canes
becomes Fix the agreement mistake
cane
sugar
is
drying and cooling the Unnecessary verb
apply
syrup
to big
tank to become Correct article usage
a big
sugar
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, juice, syrup with synonyms.
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