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local culture is badly influence by tourist,do you agree or disagree.

#culture #influence #tourist
As a result
 of globalisation and the
increasingly
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 possibility of travel abroad, people believe that in many places, local culture is becoming mixed by influences of external visitors.
In other words
, local practices,
cousine
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cuisine
 and clothes are absorbing aspects from other cultures.
This
 essay
desagrees
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disagrees
 with
this
 statement, and it will be developed in the following lines. Travelling abroad and knowing other people and their
culture
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cultures
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 is an amazing way to become aware of other ways of life. The possibility of getting in touch with locals and
learn
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 more about their history in
site
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 makes
huge
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 difference
on
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 the way we face the world.
However
, some tend to think that
this
 interchange results in
degradation
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 of local habits and beliefs, as far as the local population incorporate
behaviors
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 from outlanders. In my point of view,
this
 opinion is
completly
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completely
 wrong.
Whereas
, fostering
foreing
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foreign
visitation
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 helps to promote interest in cultural aspects and develop local pride concerning the language, local food, music and dance, and so on.
For instance
, Hawaii is
a
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 island where
hundreads
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hundreds
 of worldwide visitors go. Ceremonies and local customs are presented to the tourists and positive results come from
this
,
such
 as cultural
presservation
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preservation
 and engagement by the local young generation in these activities.
Thus
, until now the local culture is strongly preserved and spread.
To conclude
, considering that touristic movement toward local communities is a threat is a limited way of thinking about the theme. If we take a look
for
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 the benefits of having visitors from abroad, we can see that
local
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 population can benefit themselves through cultural fomentation and economic circulation.
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introduction conclusion
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logical structure
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supported main points
Support your main points with more specific examples and evidence. This could be achieved by using case studies, research, or statistics that demonstrate the cultural preservation among local communities in the face of tourism.
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relevant specific examples
Incorporate more specific and relevant examples that directly support your disagreement with the statement that tourism badly influences local culture. Make sure these examples are detailed and connected clearly to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural dilution
  • Commodification
  • Environmental degradation
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural preservation
  • Cross-cultural exchange
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalization
  • Cultural integrity
  • Sustainable tourism
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