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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and line graph compare the number of
Japanese
 individuals who travel abroad for tourism with the quantity of them going to Australia from 1985 to 1995.
Overall
, during
this
 period of time, the number of tourists has gradually
augmented
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increased
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.
Similarly
, Australia has slowly attracted more individuals from Japan. Between 1985 and 1990, there
as
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has
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 been a steady increase
of
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in
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Japanese
 people who went abroad to visit. Indeed, the number started at 5
million
 people from that nationality and obtained in 1990 over 10
million
 of them.
This
 type of evolution can be noticed in
the
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Australian tourism where it evolved from representing 2% of the market to more or less 5%. Yet, from 1990 to 1991, there was a drop in the quantity of Japan’s travelling lovers,
whom
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which
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 reached 10
million
 individuals. These statistics are noticeable in Australia’s tourism in which the
Japanese
 clients went from representing 5 % of the market to slightly over 4 units in 1990. But, the quantity of them rose back and reached 15
million
of
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Japanese
 travellers in 1995.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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