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You live in a block of flats, your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: •explain the situation •tell him/her how you are affected by this •Suggest what you want the landlord to do.

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to show my frustration regarding the ongoing problem of loud noise in my
neighborhood
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. Let me explain
you
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to you
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 more in detail. My
neighbours
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, Mr Brooke who lives in flat number 312 makes a lot of noise around the clock, which not only
disturb
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disturbs
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 us
while
 working but
also
 at night. They frequently organize parties at their house with loud music that
effects
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 our physical and mental health as we are unable to sleep properly.
Furthermore
, they throw
the
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rubbish here and there in society and when asked to clean, they reply
unapropriately
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inappropriately
appropriately
. I hope you will take some strict action or give them a warning
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 future.
This
 problem not only affect us but
also
 other society members too. Yours sincerely, John
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the situation. The letter would benefit from a clearer structure, where the second paragraph fully explains the noise issue, the third outlines the specific effects on you, and the fourth suggests a clear action for the landlord to take.
task achievement
Include more specifics about how the situation affects your daily life, suggesting possible detailed remedies, such as specified quiet times or mediation between you and the neighbor.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures to show your language ability, including complex sentences and a mix of simple and compound sentences.
task achievement
Remember to use polite language and clear requests when addressing the landlord, as courtesies are essential in formal letters.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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