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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home, now means that you must change the date of the visit -explain the important event -apologise for the sitution -suggest a new arragment.

#visit #friend #canada #event #home #change #date #-explain #-apologise #sitution #-suggest #arragment
Dear Monika, The reason why I'm addressing to apologise
from
Change preposition
to
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 you .I don'
t
 want to
late
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be late
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 ,
however
, I didn'
t
attain
Verb problem
get
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 to
airport
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the airport
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.
Meeting
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A meeting
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organized
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was organized
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 in our office
that
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which
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 is vital for us and they called out
me
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to me
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 ,I went there .
Then
 ,I came out too late and I didn'
t
 make it.But
meeting's
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the meeting's
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 been very
satisfied
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satisfactory
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,
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apply
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because
boss
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the boss
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 esteemed me . I don'
t
 want it ,
I've
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I
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known
Wrong verb form
know
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 you didn'
t
 like it ,but I
did
Verb problem
was
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 late unfortunately and I didn'
t
 go there .I apologise to you very much. I hope you'll
forgive
Correct pronoun usage
forgive me
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 .I believe you understand me.You are sociable .I value you .Please, do you excuse me? I made
plan
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apply
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a new arrangement .Only ,you need
come
Fix the infinitive
to come
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 here .We will go
a
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to a
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very good restaurant
where
Correct word choice
that
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 is very comfortable and cozy .In my opinion ,you will enjoy it. All the best, Rayhona
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Introduction
Ensure that your essay begins with a clear introductory paragraph that sets the stage for the content to follow. It should lay out the purpose of your letter and prepare the reader for the information you will be providing.
Logical Structure
Organise your ideas into clear, coherent paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, with the first sentence introducing that idea and the following sentences developing it.
Supported Main Points
Work on clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph that signify the main point. Follow these with explanations or examples that support the main point.
Complete Response
When addressing the task response, make sure to cover all elements of the task: explain the event in detail, offer a genuine apology, and provide a suggestion for a new arrangement.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Improve the clarity of your writing by expressing your ideas comprehensively. This includes using full sentences and avoiding fragmentary thoughts, maintaining subject-verb agreement, and correctly using all parts of speech.
Relevant Specific Examples
When possible, provide specific details or examples to illustrate your situation more vividly and make your writing more compelling. However, make sure these are always relevant to the task at hand.
Writing Accuracy
Work on writing accuracy, including grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation. Regular practice and review of the fundamental rules of English writing would be beneficial to improve your overall score.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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