One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer, and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantage of this development outweighs the disadvantages?

In

this

modern epoch, the medical field has been improved compared to the past.

As a result

,

civilians

'

life

expectancy

is increasing and live long

years

. I think

this

tendency has more drawbacks than benefits;

this

essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are several advantages of

civilians

are

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living in long

years

. One of the main benefits is that individuals have a chance to live

their

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family members

in

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long periods and elder people have to look after their grand-grandchildren through the advanced medical system,

hence

, they will not

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and

feeling

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depression

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.

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, Australians have the advanced medicare amenities since childhood in order to people far away from the deadly diseases. Another benefit is that the country has more

man power

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to build the nation strongly by

increase

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productivity,

export

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and volunteer

works

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. These are the advantages of

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life

expectancy

is

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increasing. Despite these merits, there are some disadvantages

of

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this

tendency. One of the main drawbacks is

that

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increase

the

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in the

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population ratio,

thus

, humans will suffer to obtain the fundamental facilities

due to

increasing

the

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demand. Needless to say, poverty will be increasing

as well as

the standard of living will be decreased. Another possible disadvantage is that the ruling party have to build numerous

elder

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homes

along

with

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retirement expenses need to be increased by expanding the

life

of

civilians

.

For instance

, the government will allocate more funds to protect the elders when their

life

expectancy

will be

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extended,

consequently

, others have to

be suffered

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by not getting the basic facilities.

To conclude

,

although

increasing the

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and spending more

years

with their family members are the benefits of people living

in

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for

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long

years

, the authority should allocate more funds and the population will be increased are the drawbacks.

However

, I think increasing the

civilians

'

life

expectancy

by the advanced medical facilities has more disadvantages than advantages.