Nowadays many workers are suffering from joint pains (such as neck pain), which they ascribe to sedentary office jobs

In

this

current day, many joint pains attack

employees

such

as neck pain, since they have

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle

in their

office

almost

everyday

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. From my perspective, I agree with that statement as many people work day by day in

a

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office

which has similar activities and lack of exercise. In the beginning, sedentary

office

jobs

are

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common in each country, including developed or poorer

country

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countries

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.

Firstly

,

this

happening is because the number of enterprises that cannot provide

sport

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rooms has increased over the

last

period.

Secondly

, there are plenty of companies which are

maintain

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profits and revenue and

not

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take care

to

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their

employees

.

As a result

, as a

demanding

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to earn money, workers have to follow the company’s

regulation

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regulations

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while

it has a strict

lifestyle

; meanwhile, they will lose their incomes which are crucial to promote their lives.

Furthermore

, since workers have duties in a company that has

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle

, they would lack

of

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exercises

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because of the limited

time

. Many

employees

will squander the majority of their

time

to work and sit in front of

computer’s

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screen without

realize

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that

time

flies.

As a consequence

of

this

habit,

join

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joint

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paints

become

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have

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a detrimental effect

for

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on

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them like neck pain which led suffering

feeling

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feelings

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to

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for

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workers. Data

analyser

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analysers

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,

for instance

, almost in each company,

they

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have to sit down in their room to analyze the firm’s data over the weekdays.

In addition

, their neck and sceletons have to suffer, if the habit

is repeat

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all the

time

. In conclusion,

employees

will suffer from joint pants because of

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle

in their

office

which there is no

time

and space to exercise.