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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, such as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
When you
living
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live
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 in a foreign
country
, you have to speak
with
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apply
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their language and you face serious social and practical
problems
 as well. I completely agree with
this
 idea and you have to deal with different
problems
. When you want to go to another
country
for living
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to live
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 or study even
for
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to
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 travel, you have to learn their language. One of the most common
problems
 for people who live abroad is they can’t communicate with native people well. It is hard to find a friend in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
,
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 if you talk
as well as
 they understand. In any situation where you have to talk more
such
 as: in university or at work office, speaking
with
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in
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native
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your native
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 language is more important because if you face
with
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any
problems
 or obstacles, you
don’t
 have
ability
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the ability
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 to talk about your
problems
 with others to share information and solve
it
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them
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. When you
living
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live
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 in a
country
where
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that
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 is not your birth
country
, sometimes you miss your original
country
 and you feel nowhere in the world can take place
your
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in your
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country
. in some cases you can’t
involve
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be involved
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 in the future of
foreign
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a foreign
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country
, they know you as a stranger and they
don’t
 want to share their
country
’s future with you. Culture is probably one of the hard things that you have to deal with.
For
example
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example,
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 in
india
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India
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 some people pray
cow
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cows
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 and they
don’t
 eat meat and if you go there you
don’t
 allow
to
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apply
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disrespect
to
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apply
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any cow in the town. In conclusion, I believe living abroad
have
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has
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 many serious
problems
 and you should prepare for anything that
maybe
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may
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 happen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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