The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.

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The graph compares the proportion of overseas

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amidst high

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alumna in Canada over a

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period from 2001 to 2006. In general, there are eight various institutions with

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numbers of foreign pupils that kept increasing over the span of 2001 to 2006 with each

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a varied tally in total. Between 2001 and 2006, New Brunswick rose approximately five

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from 7% to around 12%. Nova Scotia followed almost

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similar trend increasing from just over 6% to just under 11%.

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, the most significant change happened with British Columbia, starting from only nearly 5% before it jumped to roughly 11% .

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, the rest of

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in Canada

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as Quebec, Alberta, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, and

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Ontario only experienced a small rise between 3 to 4% in the

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period which

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to the others' statistics did not seem highly significant.

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The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.

People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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