The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates three kinds of fast food which
had been
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were
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consumed by
Australian
teenagers
from
years
1975 until 200.
Overall
, the
figures
shows
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show
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that fish and chips
was
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were
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highly eaten by
Australian
teenagers
then
gradually decreased during
he
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the
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following
years
. Meanwhile, the other two types of food like Hamburgers and pizza witnessed a declining rate of
consumption
and
then
increased gradually during the following
years
. In 1975, the amount of fish and chip fast food
was
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apply
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eaten by
large
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a large
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amount of
Australian
teenagers
reached
to
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apply
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the
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a
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peak
at
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apply
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that year up to 100
thousands
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100,000
teenagers
.
On the other hand
,
that
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the
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figures
had been declined gradually until
year
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the year
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2000, and
the
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apply
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consumption
reached
to
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apply
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39
thousands
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thousand
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at
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in
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that year. Meanwhile, the
consumption
of burgers and pizzas was about 1000
persons
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people
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in 1975, and
this
figures
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figure
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gradually increased reached to 100
thousands
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thousand
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eaters
for
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of
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Hamburgers and 80
thousands
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thousand
show examples
eaters
for
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of
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pizza.
Moreover
, the
figures
remained steady for both between 1985
until
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and
show examples
2000. In conclusion, the amount of
Australian
teenagers
consumption for
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consuming
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fish and chips
had been felt
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went
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down sharply during the examined period
while
Hamburgers’
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Hamburgers
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and
piazzas’
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piazzas
show examples
figures
raised up
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rose
show examples
during the following
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, teenagers, years, figures, consumption, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Consumption
  • Fast food
  • Australian teenagers
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Significant rise/decline
  • Compare
  • Contrast
  • Implications
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fish and chips
  • Data points
  • Period (time frame)
  • 25-year period
  • Paraphrase
  • Notable features
  • General increase
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