The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013

The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013
The representation below compares the percentage of American citizens, who eat out fast foods throughout a decade. At first glance is evident that
overall
,
people
usually go to fast food
restaurant
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weekly and monthly and more often than not eat more frequently
or
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apply
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while
same
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the same
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percentages belong to
who
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those who
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prefer not
or
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to or
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rarely
eating
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eat
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out. Regarding the given information, individuals
are
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ate
convenient
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food once a week and
one
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once
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or twice a month in 2003. The quantity of each of which was around 30% and has had more difference in amount comparing to each other.
On the contrary
, the number of
people
who
do
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did
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so weekly in 2006 touched a peak at about 33% and
then
it
has
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dropped by around 8% in 2013 respectively.
More over
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, as it
clear
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in 2013
the
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more
people
tend to eat once or twice a month and
in
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a result it hits a climax at around 33%.
On the other hand
, the number of
people
who tend more toward eating every day
compare
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to
who
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those who
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never ate out
are
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slightly less. and
this
story can be related to
who
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those who
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either ate out several times or rarely by approximately between 15% And 20% respectively.
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