Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behavior is now having a negative impact on society.to what extent do you agree?
Respecting and treating
children
to parents
in a good manner is an arguable issue in the modern world. Children
do not look up to their mother or father as they did long ago which leads to emerging undesirable consequences for communities, and I will explain why in this
essay.
Firstly
, children
have been become
blunt as much as in the past and they do not look up Change to the active voice
become
their
Change preposition
to their
parents
. Since,
Remove the comma
apply
parents
high pay attention on
our youngsters and they never like to train via punishment. Change preposition
to
For example
, when a baby has worse conduct, mother
or father Correct pronoun usage
their mother
his mother
her mother
encourage
him, it causes Correct subject-verb agreement
encourages
to
repeat actions Correct pronoun usage
him to
who they
Correct pronoun usage
that he
like
Correct subject-verb agreement
likes
it
. another issue is Correct pronoun usage
apply
only
Add an article
the only
child
in the majority of families. Because,
Remove the comma
apply
children
are only child
and all Fix the agreement mistake
children
member
nuclear family love them it leads to disciplineFix the agreement mistake
members
a
spoilt Change preposition
of a
child
or black sheep which it
has Correct pronoun usage
apply
negative
impact on Add an article
a negative
community
. Add an article
the community
For instance
, if an adolescent school incorrectly in family
when Add an article
the family
a family
enter
Change the verb form
entering
the
society, their Correct article usage
apply
behavior
may exacerbate against Change the spelling
behaviour
another
people and Correct quantifier usage
other
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
threats
the world.
It is true that Replace the word
threaten
children
need to foster
Wrong verb form
be fostered
of
Change preposition
by
parents
and they should protect
in the community, so Wrong verb form
be protected
this
is duty
Correct article usage
the duty
legal
Change preposition
of legal
guardian
Fix the agreement mistake
guardians
such
as fathers and mothers. Despite this
, it seems that having a child
in the family is crucial, because parents
are extremely attracted to their children
and they forgot
to school correctly them, and Wrong verb form
forget
this
tends to misbehave teens to their parents
and negative influence in the world.
To conclude
, it seems to me that children
are rude more than before, because of only child
in families. Thus
, parents
do not exactly educate their youths and this
is caused
Wrong verb form
causes
they
Correct pronoun usage
them
have
worse behavior with Fix the infinitive
to have
parents
.Correct pronoun usage
their parents
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