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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989
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The presented list gives data on changes in average
prices
 of buildings in two spans of 1990-1995 and 1996-2002 compared with the
prices
 of 1989.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 New York, Madrid and London experienced a
period
 of remarkable changes in house
prices
 during 1996 and 2002 .
By contrast
, Tokyo did not show any
noticeably
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 change related to an increase. Looking at the first part of the given chart in detail, it is evident from
interval
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the interval
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 between 1990-1995 that there is no
markedly
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 shape except a negative
rises
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. The
prices
 in Madrid and Frankfurt ranged from 1% to 2.5%
while
 the costs of New York's houses fell
until
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a
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minus 5%.
At
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 the
period
 the figures
of
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 Tokyo and London were below over 5%
at
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a
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the
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 minus side.
According to
 the second time
period
,1996-2002, the
prices
 of housing surged to more than 10% in London and they escalated by 5% and 4% in New York and Madrid respectively. In Frankfurt, the amount of house
prices
 formed approximately 1%.
However
, which form should be marked is that the house
prices
 were signed by minus 5% negatively over the
period
in
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1996-2002 as they were compared to their
prices
 in 1989
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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