The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.
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The
graph
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shows the
amount
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number
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of
visitors
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to and from
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UK
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the UK
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,
while
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the bar chart explains the 5 most likely countries that
had
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have
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been visited by
UK
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residents
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.
Overall
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, the visits
done
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made
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by
UK
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residents
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to other countries increased during the five years in the line
graph
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. On
other
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the other
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hand, the most popular destination for
the
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apply
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UK
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visitors
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was France in the
year
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of 1999. The figures in the line
graph
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explained the number of
visitors
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to
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UK
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the UK
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had increased sharply from 12
million
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to 52
million
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from the
year
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of
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1979 to 1999. Meanwhile, the figures
of
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for
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travelling
UK
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residents
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to other countries increased gradually during the examined period. On
other
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the other
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hand, the bar
graph
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showed the most popular
destinations
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destination
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visited by
UK
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residents
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during the
year
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1999 was France, as the number of
visitors
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reached
to
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apply
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11
million
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of
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apply
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UK
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visitor
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visitors
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.
while
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the least visited country was Turkey which visited
by
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2.5
million
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in the
year
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of
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apply
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1999.
To sum up
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, there was
upward
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an upward
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trend of
visitors
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to and from
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UK
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the UK
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in the line
graph
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. On
other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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the bar
graph
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indicates that the most popular destination for
UK
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residents
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was France in
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year
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the year
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1999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, visitors, uk, residents, year, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "explains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • consistent increase
  • sharp rise
  • gradual growth
  • outbound travel
  • inbound tourism
  • popular destination
  • significantly outstripped
  • gap widened
  • given period
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