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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit Explain the important event Apologise for the situation Suggest a new arrengement

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Dear Shakhrizoda, How are you? I am writing
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about our measure.I am apologizing
from
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 you
due to
this
 day will be
holiday
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a holiday
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 in my home, my relationship visit to my home. If you want you may visit
to
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this
 holiday,
however
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 you want will be only you and me in
this
 measure I am sorry my best friend, I
am not want
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, it
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position is very bad for me but my mum
call
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 relative to
this
 day, my mum
not
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does not
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 know about our step. From my
perspective
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 you understand my situation since you are my best friend.
According to
 my observations, our arrangements will be
other day
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another day
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.
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, if you want,our step will be next Sunday for the research leads me to believe you will be loafer on Sunday. Best weshes, Feruza
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter contains a clear introduction, main body, and conclusion. Each section should serve a clear purpose and lead logically to the next.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphing to structure your letter effectively. Each paragraph should contain one main idea with supporting sentences.
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Improve clarity by using simple and accurate language. Avoid vague terms and be specific in your descriptions and explanations.
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Provide a clear rationale for why the visit dates must be changed, and make a polite and specific suggestion for new arrangements.
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Apologize sincerely and directly for the inconvenience caused. Ensure the apology reflects an understanding of the impact on your friend.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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