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• These days, using chemicals in food production and preservation is increasing. Do the disadvantages of using chemicals in food outweigh the advantages? • Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. •

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In the current situation,
due to
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 lifestyle modifications and rapid growth in the consumption of
food
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, factories have been constrained to use hazardous
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synthetic
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 chemicals in the manufacturing and preservation process.
Although
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 the existence of chemicals in
food
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 is beneficial at some point, in my opinion, the disadvantages go beyond the advantages and can bring about diseases. On the one hand, using chemical substances which are pesticides and herbicides specifically in production has led to optimization. Considering that wasting
food
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 reduces,
as a consequence
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, the economic cycle improves and productivity boosts.
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, preservatives that are placed in
food
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 to prevent spoilage and longer expiration
date
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is
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are
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 significantly beneficial.
Above all
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, not only
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colouring
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 and
flavoring
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flavouring
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 are prompting, but
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 convincing consumers to purchase them in a considerable deal is one of the advertising tricks.
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, research achievements are confident that relative merits,
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, to the companies and not the customers.
For
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this
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 reason, scientists have persuaded society to use less processed
food
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. As a case in point, reports have been announced that there is a direct association between overconsuming processed
food
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 and serious health problems
such
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 as cancer, diabetes, high blood pressure, obesity, and heart disease.
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, It is predicted synthetic additives that become residue will be harmful to the environment progressively. To draw a conclusion from the discussion revolving around chemical additives, despite the fact that there are positive aspects to using them in
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,
unfortu- nately
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unfortunately
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, the downsides overshadow the benefits and the activity of the mentioned producers should be suspended.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health risks
  • Chemically treated
  • Allergies
  • Resistance to antibiotics
  • Environmental impact
  • Chemical runoff
  • Water pollution
  • Nutritional value
  • Crop yields
  • Shelf life
  • Pests and diseases
  • Regulatory bodies
  • Stricter regulations
  • Public health
  • Environmental integrity
  • Technological advancements
  • Safer alternatives
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