More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol these days. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?
Nowadays, teenagers are using a lot of addictive substances
such
as drugs
and alcohol. This
problem is caused because a lot of them have curiosity and want to be accepted in a social group, and the most viable solution, it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
show
to the young generation the consequences of keeping an addict
life to Change the verb form
addicted
drugs
.
Drugs
and alcohol have become popular and fashion style in new generations, a lot of teenagers decide to try those substances because they want to be accepted in a specific group or sometimes they have curiosity about experimentation sensations that consume those products,
since most of the time the nervous system accelerate the metabolism, and the feeling and emotions became stronger, being the sensation of forgetting irrelevant Remove the comma
apply
problems
and later, after many tries became a therapy or reality scape caused for the world change, whether school, family rules, relationships or others, since in many occasions they do not feel trust to share problems
with some close friends or family that can give emotional support, and use the drugs
or alcohol as an easy exit. For example
, the US last
year faced a high percentage of addiction in cities as Baltimore, being marihuana the principal drug that younger use daily, since in the interviews they said that drugs
are the best solution and they do not judge.
However
, to reduce this
problem, families should show
to new generation real examples of people who decide to keep drugs
in their lives, showing the impact of those decisions in the future and professional careers, It also
brings trust and nice comprehension of their age problems
and gives solution without any judge and bias, since they probably will feel support for they closest. For example
in some families, they plan weekend activities that link some of the young people's interest
and decide with their consultation, opening the door to Fix the agreement mistake
interests
show
them that family is a space to communicate and enjoy time.
in conclusion, it is necessary to get a balance
relationship with the younger ones and Change the verb form
balanced
show
them, that family is one of the safe spaces to share problems
and look for possible solutions together, without consume
any Change the form of the verb
consuming
drug
that can affect the future and the quality of life that they have.Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
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