Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Describe the table below showing the percentage of the population aged 65 and over in three countries for 100 years. Write at least 150 words. Table: Percentage of Population Aged 65 and Over in Three Countries (1900-2000) YearAustraliaBelgiumCosta Rica 1900583 19507104 2000151812
From the table above, we can see that for
last
100 years from 1900 until 2000, Correct article usage
the last
Belgium
have
the highest Change the verb form
has
population
for
people aged 65 and over in the three countries (Australia, Change preposition
of
Belgium
, and Costa Rica). Belgium
have
the biggest portion Change the verb form
has
for
that Change preposition
of
population
with an average up
to 50% Change preposition
of up
from
Change preposition
of
total
in the three countries each year. Correct article usage
the total
Contrast from
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In contrast to
Belgium
, Costa Rica have
the lowest Change the verb form
has
population
for that aged
each year of observation. Replace the word
age
This
data need
more research to check what is behind the situation. We must compare based on Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
total
Correct article usage
the total
population
from
each country and check the composition for the Change preposition
of
population
aged below 65. After we get all the data, we can analyze and compare them to make sure fair
Change preposition
of fair
condition
on observation. The conclusionFix the agreement mistake
conditions
,
can lead us to other assumptions to check, like birth Remove the comma
apply
rate
, death rate
, etc. Maybe that
Correct word choice
apply
Belgium
have
Change the verb form
has
highest
birth Correct article usage
the highest
rate
or maybe Costa Rica have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
highest
death Correct article usage
the highest
rate
,
and many Remove the comma
apply
others assumption
and Fix the agreement mistake
other assumptions
conclusion
we can get.Fix the agreement mistake
conclusions
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task response
It is critical to adhere strictly to the data provided in the task; avoid making unsupported assumptions or suggestions that require external data or further research, such as birth rates or reasons behind the data.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure the essay includes an introduction summarizing what the graph shows, a body that describes the details of the data, and a conclusion that summarizes the main trends or findings.
task response
Improve accuracy by avoiding numerical inaccuracies - the task does not mention averages up to 50%, and ensuring all data comparisons are explicitly tied to the figures given in the table.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and cohesive devices to better organize the essay and make the relationship between ideas clearer.
task response
Provide specific examples and comparisons directly from the data. For instance, describe the actual percentages in certain years and how they change over time.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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