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The chart below gives information about how families in опе country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant

The chart below gives information about how families in опе country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant
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apply
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bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the ways
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in how
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how
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which
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families
 in
a
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apply
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one nation
spare
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spared
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theire
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their
 weekly wages in 1968 and
in
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apply
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2018.
In
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overall
 ,
1968
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in 1968
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 folks
have spended
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spent
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 mostly on food from
theire
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their
there
 weekly collection of money, and clothing , footwear and housing were the 2nd most spended ways in that year.
Whereas
, in 2018
lesuire
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leisure
 activities made the highest
quato
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quality
 in weekly income from
families
 and housing and transport were in 2nd and 3rd places
awith
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with
 a close gap compared to 1968. In
details
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detail
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,
families
 have
spended
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spent
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 35%
from
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of
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there
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their
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 weekly wages ,and in 2018 the amount paid for
foood
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food
 was
nealy
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nearly
 half
from
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of
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 it.
However
,
rest
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the rest
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 of the methods hit a lower price
presentage
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percentage
 compared to
the
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food in
such
 as 2nd highest spend on
while
 housing and clothing, footwear achieves a 10% from weekly income, and all the rest were below the 10% from weekly income with fuel and power spend approximately around 6% depicting as the lowest. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, in 2018
families
spended
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spent
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 mostly on leisure activities with nearly 22.5% spending from what they had for a week.Yet, they had a more
balance
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balanced
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 distribution of
there
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their
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 money
spend
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spent
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compred
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compared
 to the year 1968 and for housing and
transport
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transport,
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 they
spending
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spent
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nealy
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nearly
 19% and 14% orderly.
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