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The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of populations in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo and Shanghai.

The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of populations in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo and Shanghai.
The bar charts illustrate data about the actual and predicted populations in the different cities. Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai between 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is undeniable that Sao Paulo had the most
population
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 size. Followed by Shanghai and Jakarta respectively.
Moreover
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, In terms of actual populations compared with predicted apparent that actual populations were higher than predicted. From Sao Paulo, it can be seen that the
population
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 started at approximately 17
million
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 in 1990. In terms of forecast, the
population
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 in 2000 was approximately 24
million
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.
Whereas
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 the real
population
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 was 22
million
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. In 1990 Shanghai's
population
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 was 12.5
million
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.
Although
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 in 2000 the actual
population
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 slightly decreased to 11
million
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also
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 the predicted
population
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 was 15
million
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.
Furthermore
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, Jakarta information shows that started at 8
million
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 in 1990 and significantly increased to 13.5
million
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 in 2000 and had predicted around 13
million
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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