The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie chart shows the
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average
consumption
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of
sodium
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,
saturatedfats
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saturated fats
saturated fat
and added sugars by meal. All three categories of nutrients may be harmful to health if over-consumed.
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,
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the intake of
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and saturated fat is higher at
dinner
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any other meal, added sugar is eaten most in snacks.
Sodium
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consumption
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is highest at
dinner
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and second highest at lunch, making up 43% and 29% of total
sodium
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consumption
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respectively. The proportions of
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type of nutrient taken in at snack time and breakfast are the same, both at 14%.
Dinner
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and lunch
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account for the largest and the
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proportions of total saturated fat intake respectively, at 37% and 26%.
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, a greater proportion is eaten at snack time than at breakfast at 21% and 16% respectively. Compared with the other two nutrients,
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sugar has a relatively low
consumption
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level at
dinner
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, at 23%. It is snacks that are the greatest source of sugar intake, at 42%.
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, like the other nutrients, it is
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consumed least at breakfast, at only 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, sodium, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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