The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food

restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The representation below compares the percentage of American citizens, who eat out fast foods throughout a decade. At first glance is evident that
overall
,
people
usually go to fast food restaurants weekly and monthly and more often than not eat more frequently,
while
the same percentages belong to those who prefer not to or rarely eat out. Regarding the given information, individuals
ate
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who ate
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convenience food once a week and once or twice a month in 2003
was
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around 30% and had more differences in amount
comparing
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to each other.
On the contrary
, the number of
people
who did so weekly in 2006 touched a peak at about 33% and
then
it dropped by around 8% in 2013 respectively.
Moreover
, as it is clear in 2013 more
people
tend to eat once or twice a month and
as a
result
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result,
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it hits a climax at around 33%.
On the other hand
, the number of
people
who tend more toward eating every day compared to those who never ate out is slightly less. and
this
story can be related to those who either ate out several times or rarely by approximately between 15% And 20% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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