Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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people
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we study best- through in-person interaction with a
teacher
in a classroom. Some
people
believe that online learning is more effective than offline learning. I will discuss both views with my own opinion in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, nowadays in
this
modern world
people
have started to learn everything online. We may
educated
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ourselves from wherever we are whenever we want. If we have a smartphone with a good internet it is easy to update our knowledge. Nowadays every new
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are preferring
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prefers
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to study
in
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online as they are not willing to attend physical
class
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classes
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.
For example
, I
have
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completed my bachelor’s degree at Sri Krishna Arts and Science College
at
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the year 2022. I did not go
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due to
covid
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COVID-19
, I was engaged
with
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online. Every subject was taught by
teacher
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the teacher
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through
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and even exams
was
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conducted online. So, here is my opinion every young
people
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person
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prefers to do their studying online as they
enagage
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engage
them with various
activites
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activities
. It provided us a comfortable zone to
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our lives.
Secondly
, some
people
think that the best way to learn is
going
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to the place where enrol themselves . It makes every
children
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to get
into
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together and
to
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get
involve
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with teachers. They may build
a
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strong communication with the teachers and it helps to clear doubts
whatever
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we have at the same time. It might increase our confidence and
carrer
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career
growth. We have a good relationship with the
people
around us. For, examples many of my friends are going
in-person
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in person
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to update their knowledge and it
boost
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their
self interest
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self-esteem
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and
self confidence
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.
To conclude
, in today’s world some
people
think that online learning is good and some
people
think that we get
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education through in-person interaction with a
teacher
in a classroom;
therefore
my opinion is
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better
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to study through in-person interaction with a
teacher
compared to online learning environment.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences within the paragraph are related to that main idea. Avoid mixing different arguments within one paragraph.
coherence cohesion
In the introduction, briefly mention the arguments for both sides to provide a clear outline of what is to follow in the essay. In the conclusion, succinctly summarize the discussion and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases appropriately to show the relationship between sentences and paragraphs, which helps the reader to follow your argument more easily.
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Address all parts of the task by discussing both views and providing your own opinion. Make sure your own opinion is clear and consistent throughout.
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Expand on your points with specific examples and explanations to better support your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
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To achieve clarity, ensure that your ideas are comprehensive and expressed in an organized manner. Maintain focus and avoid deviating from the topic at hand.

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