The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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outlets that started in a single country from 2011 to 2018.

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, when all the figures are taken into consideration, it can be seen that the closure of stores was maximum

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the outlets that opened were minimum in the given period. As far as the trend of closing shop considered, it started from around 6500 in 2011 and showed little decline till 2012, when it positioned at almost 5900,

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, at the beginning of 2013 it took a sharp rise and reached its highest position nearly 7000

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of 2013 before falling to nearly 500 and that was the lowest point of decreasing in 2015,

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figure had taken a brisk incline in the starting of same year and it returned to almost similar figures where it started from

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of 2016 and remained almost stable for remaining left years in the figures. Moving The rest of the information, in the case of opening outlets it initiated from about 85,00 which was the highest opening from its former opposite trend in 2011,

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trend again took a dramatic dip till 2012 but at the beginning of 2013 it obtained big rise for next two years and

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of 2014 that was its second highest position

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, it followed the declining fashion for next four years.

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