The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The representation below illustrates the statistics of Australian people who did physical
activity
constantly through six peer-groups
between Correct your spelling
peer groups
female
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females
male
in 2010. A first glance at the diagram, reveals that all in all both genders physical Fix the agreement mistake
males
activity
has fluctuated by each age
group. Although
the highest figure has been recorded for 45-54-year-old women’s
, the lowest number is associated with 35-44-year-old males so far.
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the highest is accounted for 35 to 44 , the lowest is for 65 and over woman
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women
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52.5 and 47.8 respectively. Change preposition
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In addition
, the highest percentage is followed by whom are attend to physical activity
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the 55
age
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around 6%
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a man
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man
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men
whom
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activity
is declined by going older. Moreover
, the lowest number was associat
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the highest record was for Correct article usage
the 15
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