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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The given representation depicts
,
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 the development plan
that
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apply
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of a
town
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center
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centre
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, known as Islip from what is being now. At first glance is evident that
vast
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a vast
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 number of constructions are estimated
such
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 as
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway around the
town
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, which is the obvious one. Regarding
to
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the nowadays plan, the
town
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center
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centre
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 is contained
of
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apply
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a main road from west to east
that is
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 passed through 2
raw
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row
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 of
shops
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.
This
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 part of
town
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 is predicted more expanding.
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,
upside
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the upside
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 raw of
shops
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 would be modified as a shopping
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center
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centre
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.
moreover
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, some construction namely
bus
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a bus
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 station, car park and new housing
is
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are
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 contributed to
perior
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prior
shops
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 location.
On the other hand
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, can be seen the main road is changing into
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a pedestrian
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pedestrian only
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pedestrian-only
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while
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 the south
shops
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remaining
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remain
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 still.
In addition
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, the housing area right under
southern
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the southern
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shops
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 is going to expand
while
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 the park is decreasing in
its
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apply
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size. The school location will be unchanged and a carriageway is called Dual expected to be built all around the
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center
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centre
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, center, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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