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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the financial value of
water
 in
few
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a few
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 cities in Australia. I summarise the information by selecting and analysing the main features. By spectating
few
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a few
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 cities, we can see that usage of
water
 more than 125KL may
cause
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cost
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upto
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up to
 $1 it seems.
Average
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The average
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 bill per household is $312 by using
water
. The table scheduled and represented the rate of the
water
 and it was
determained
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determined
 by
usege
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usage
use
 of
water
. Brisbane city holds
very
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a very
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 minimum rate of
water
 used by people. It holds $0.81 for the usage of
water
 up to 125
KL
. The same city
charges
 0.84$ for the usage of
water
 more than 125
KL
. Perth
charges
 $0.42 dollars for utilisation of
water
upto
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up to
 125
KL
 and $1.50 dollars for more than 125
KL
.
Finally
, these few cities
levieng
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levying
living
leaving
 similar
rate
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rates
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 of
charges
 for the utilisation of
water
. Sydney has
same
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the same
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 amount of
charges
 for
upto
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up to
 125KL and
also
 for over 125KL.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, kl, charges with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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