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the plans below show the layout of a public library now and how it will look after development summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The drawing depicts the building sketch of a community
library
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 20 years back and today.
Overall
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,
although
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, the basic
structure
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 of the
library
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 building remained unchanged, almost all the internal arrangements and occupants of different areas have been changed in present. in detail, the entrance and the basic layout of rooms remain unchanged in the current
structure
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, and other than that, spaces for open areas within the
library
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 remain the same.
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, the previous enquiry desk has been turned into a cafe in the present
structure
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, and tables and chairs, which were located in the middle of the old building were removed and that area is now kept as an open space inside the
library
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.
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,
room
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 arrangement has been totally rearranged with the new development. The reading
room
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 which was situated left side of the entrance has changed to a computer
room
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, and the next
room
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 on the left side has been given a little bit more
room
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 to develop as a children's
room
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 with a seating area
while
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 the children's book area in the old
structure
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 has turned into a lecture
room
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 with the present arrangement.
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement score, ensure that you have addressed all aspects of the task. While you have provided a summary, incorporating more detail and specific comparisons between the past and present layout can enhance comprehensiveness.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a higher score in Coherence and Cohesion, your response needs a logical structure that guides the reader clearly from introduction to conclusion. It should have cohesive devices that connect ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
Coherence and Cohesion
To further support your main points, consider including more specific examples and comparisons that directly illustrate the changes that have occurred over time.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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