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The world is experiencing dramatic in population,which is causing problems not only for developing countries but also for developed nations Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes and suggest at least one possible solution.

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 the UK people who did not have a job
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 the majority of humans did
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, went shopping and found a job in the mornings. The most salient
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 was that 48% of unemployed
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 preferred housework in the morning and 21% in the afternoon,
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 preferred to research an occupation in the morning and 12% in the afternoon.
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 worked in the garden.
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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to address the topic directly, and that your introduction and conclusion are clearly focused on the issue of overpopulation and its solutions.
logical structure
Ensure logical structure by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered on a single main point relating to the problems caused by overpopulation.
supported main points
Support your main points with clear examples or evidence, specifically related to the problems of overpopulation and the solutions you suggest.
complete response
Ensure that your essay directly responds to the prompt, discussing the problems of overpopulation and suggesting at least one solution. The current response does not address the prompt as required.
clear comprehensive ideas
Develop clear and comprehensive ideas that relate specifically to the overpopulation issue, rather than presenting unfocused information.
relevant specific examples
Use relevant and specific examples to support your points, ensuring they are directly related to the problems and solutions of overpopulation.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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