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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The provided line graph delineates how people in four
Europian
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European
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 countries spent their money on
books
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 in the interval between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that
,
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 Germans have bought
books
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 more than others throughout the whole years,
in contrast
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,
in
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apply
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overall
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the Austrian's
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Austrian's
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Austrian
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 crowd
were
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was
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 not willing to
buying
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buy
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books
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 as much as others,
also
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in
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apply
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for three years 2003,2004 and 2005 their
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books
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book
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 shops were crowd more than Italy's.
First,
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at the start point of the
measurement
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 the
numers
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numbers
 80, 55, and 50
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million
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millions
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millions of
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 American
dolloars
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dollars
 show money spent on
book-shopping
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book shopping
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 in Germany
France
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 and Italy
repectively
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respectively
. the rank of each country does not
changed
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change
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 with an expectation of Italy, Germany was the most active in reading
book
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books
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next,
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France
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 ranked two.
to
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To
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 be more precise:about 95
millions
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million
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 for Germany, 74 for
France
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 and just over 60 for Italy. Some alternation
have
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has
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 taken place during those years,the
grow
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growth
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 in Austria was sharp and it
overtake
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overtakes
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 Italy in2003 in spite of
a
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an
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 experience of
level
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the level
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 of from 1999 to 2001.
Moreover
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,
climbing
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the climbing
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 of Italian people in book-shopping was changed to
a
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apply
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decrease
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decreased
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 and because of that was not
success
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a success
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 to
becomig
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becoming
become
replace
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replacing
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of
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apply
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France
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while
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 they were
approximalty equall
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approximately equal
 in 1997.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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