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Many people disagree with a school policy that forces children to learn a new language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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education organizations add new languages
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 the subjects so that pupils can learn them and many people are against
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 will discuss both sides. First of all,learning
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language
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help students to increase their knowledge .As during learning
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 they will try to learn
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 culture about that
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 to which that
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curiosity
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 ,as they have to remember different words,sentences and
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 skills of students can become excellent.Another reason for
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 policy is that it will work as a great blessing for children in future because if they move to abroad
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study or work ,they can easily adapt
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 and can make
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friends
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 can happen that they do not have enough time to focus on their health.
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Language Usage
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Introduction
In the introduction, clearly state your thesis and outline the points you will discuss in the essay.
Logical Structure
Use paragraphs to organize your ideas, making one clear point in each paragraph, and use linking words or phrases to connect these ideas.
Supported Main Points
Support main points with specific examples or explanations to demonstrate a deeper level of understanding and to make your argument more compelling.
Language Usage
To avoid being repetitive, try to vary your language by using synonyms and complex sentence structures.
Conclusion
Restate your main ideas and summarize your argument in a conclusion, ensuring it's in line with what you've written throughout your essay.
Task Achievement
In the case of disagreeing with a policy, discuss the reasons for disagreement and offer alternative solutions or perspectives.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
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Relevant Specific Examples
When providing examples, ensure they are relevant and detailed enough to substantiate your arguments effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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