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Many people disagree with a school policy that forces children to learn a new language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #school #policy #forces #children #language
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 most
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education organizations add new languages
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 the subjects so that pupils can learn them and many people are against
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this
 rule.
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,
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 personally
apppreciate
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appreciate
this
 policy and in
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the upcoming
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paragraph
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 will discuss both sides. First of all,learning
new
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language
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help students to increase their knowledge .As during learning
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language
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 they will try to learn
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the
 culture about that
place
 to which that
language
 belongs.There will
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curiosity
 among them to learn about the history of that
place
.
Secondly
 ,as they have to remember different words,sentences and
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grammar
,the
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 skills of students can become excellent.Another reason for
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praising
passing
this
 policy is that it will work as a great blessing for children in future because if they move to abroad
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study or work ,they can easily adapt
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cukture
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culture
 of that
place
 and can make
freinds
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friends
 easily. On the opposite side,it can be
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stressful
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 additional
language
along with
 the subjects .It can be difficult for them to give equal time to all the subjects or
this
also
 can happen that they do not have enough time to focus on their health.
Moreover
,adding
new
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language
 can hurt the emotions of the people of that
place
 because it can make
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them
 feel that their children are going away from their culture. so ,
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 it is
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 advantage for children to learn
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 as it will be good for them in all aspects .
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