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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is a tendency that some
languages
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 are starting to disappear.
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 some individuals, if it happens, there will be not a lot of
languages
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 and
this
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 lead to facilitation of the life in the world.
This
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 essay completely disagrees with
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 statement
due to
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 some reasons that will be explained in
further
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 paragraphs. First of all, every
language
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 has its own history, which some people do not want to forget. They
conversely
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 try to maintain and encourage others to learn their
language
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.
Moreover
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, some people introduce their own
language
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 to their kids as one of the methods to save it.
For example
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, in my country - Kazakhstan, where
population
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the population
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 speak
in
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different
languages
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, especially
in
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Russian, a lot of humans teach their children the Kazakh
language
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 from their childhood because, if they do not try to do it,
Kazakh
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the Kazakh
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language
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 disappear.
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,
this
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 lead to forgetting about our tradition, history
as well as
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 our uniqueness. It is
the
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 fact, that almost every country in
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 world
support
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supports
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 their
language
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by
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in
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 various ways.
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, if students go to
particular
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a particular
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 country with
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a study
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 purpose, they need to know
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language
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the language
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 of
this
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 nation. It is one of the requirements of universities or scholarships. In French individuals are required to know French, in Korea - Korean
language
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 etc.
In addition
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 to
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, some workplaces demand to learn
foreigners
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foreigners'
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 local
language
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 in order to be able to work there. In conclusion, it is very crucial to not forget about own
languages
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 and society should maintain and promote their
language
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 to others by different techniques
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apply
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to save not only
history
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the history
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, but
also
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traditions
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the traditions
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 of their nation.

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coherence cohesion
You need to work on your logical structure. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that relates to the topic, and use cohesive devices such as linking words and transitions effectively.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully introduced the topic and provided a conclusion, which is good. Ensure that both sections are clear to the reader and connect well with the body paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Although your main points are supported, aim to develop them more fully. You could use a wider range of examples and ensure that they clearly support your argument.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response to the prompt. However, strive to fully develop your argument by addressing all parts of the prompt.
task achievement
Try to express your ideas more comprehensively. Work on explaining your points thoroughly and use varied sentence structures to articulate your argument effectively.
task achievement
Use relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points. These should be detailed and clearly linked to the main arguments you're presenting in your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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