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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates British
Emigration
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 to several destinations in five countries from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
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 Australia has the biggest
number
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 of
emigration
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 compared to other countries.
On the other hand
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, New Zealand and The USA have the lowest
number
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 of
emigration
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. The
emigration
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 to Australia growth
fluctuate
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fluctuates
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 with the highest
populations
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population
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 up to fifty
thousand
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 in 2006.
However
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, New
Zealand
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Zealand's
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emigration
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 from British
has
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had
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stable
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a stable
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 decrease from 2004 to 2007 with the lowest
number
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 twenty
thousand
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 in 2007.
Similarly
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, the growth of
emigration
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 from British to The USA was unsteady between 2004
until
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and
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 2007 with the lowest
number
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 of people in 2005 and the highest
number
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 in 2004 and 2005.
In addition
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, Spain has gradually
decrease
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decreased
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 from up to thirty
thousand
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 people in 2004 to below thirty
thousand
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 people in 2007.
Finally
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, the
number
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 of
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emigration
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emigrants
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 in France has enormously
grow
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grown
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 from 2004 to 2005 but the growth
is rapidly decrease
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is rapidly decreasing
is rapidly decreased
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 between 2005
until
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and
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 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, number, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • migrate
  • destination
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • spike
  • drop
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • stable
  • consistent
  • overview
  • summarize
  • highlight
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