You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates British
Emigration
to several destinations in five countries from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
Australia has the biggest
number
of
emigration
compared to other countries.
On the other hand
, New Zealand and The USA have the lowest
number
of
emigration
. The
emigration
to Australia growth
fluctuate
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fluctuates
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with the highest
populations
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population
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up to fifty
thousand
in 2006.
However
, New
Zealand
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Zealand's
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emigration
from British
has
Wrong verb form
had
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stable
Correct article usage
a stable
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decrease from 2004 to 2007 with the lowest
number
twenty
thousand
in 2007.
Similarly
, the growth of
emigration
from British to The USA was unsteady between 2004
until
Correct word choice
and
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2007 with the lowest
number
of people in 2005 and the highest
number
in 2004 and 2005.
In addition
, Spain has gradually
decrease
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decreased
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from up to thirty
thousand
people in 2004 to below thirty
thousand
people in 2007.
Finally
, the
number
of
emigration
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emigrants
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in France has enormously
grow
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grown
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from 2004 to 2005 but the growth
is rapidly decrease
Change the verb form
is rapidly decreasing
is rapidly decreased
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between 2005
until
Correct word choice
and
show examples
2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, number, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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