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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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pie graphs illustrate the various ways that
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
,
Sweden
 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom process their harmful
waste
. The measurement is provided in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
waste
 being processed.
Overall
, it is noticeable that both
Sweden
 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom mainly use underground
method
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methods
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 to manage their
waste
, meanwhile recycling is the most widely adopted means in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
. Looking more specifically, both
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
 and
Sweden
 share the same ways to combat
the
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apply
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harmful
waste
. For
Korea
, there are 69% of
waste
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the waste
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being
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is
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 recycled, 22% of them being put underground and 9% of
them
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it
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being
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is
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 destroyed by incineration,
while
 the same means account for 25%, 55% and 20% respectively for
Sweden
.
United
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The United
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 Kingdom does not recycle
waste
,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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 it introduces chemical treatment and dumping
waste
 at sea, which both destroy 8% of
waste
. 82% of the
waste
 is processed by underground method
while
 2% is by incineration.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words korea, sweden, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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